What do you think of my writing, please be completely honest?

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beginning of new book, , dont think good. please give me opinion on if or not :)

(italicized)thanks weather report robert. onto 1 of talked technologies of our day, synth-gs! these things have been sweeping nation, heck, world ever since creation world-renown scientist *jonathan regello* on year ago. now, of have heard of these amazing little creations, of haven’t out under rock you’ve been living!”
“oh, ryan, you’re funny. synth-g’s synthetic, laboratory made genes biggest thing of century! if have ever wanted able draw, or play soccer well, synth-g product you. mimic actual genes might have in body give talent chose.”
“wait, hold on second, tina. can’t talent quite yet. scientists behind epidemic have few available right now. of popular ones football, soccer, gymnastics, volleyball, painting, drawing, guitar, violin, , last not least, piano. don’t worry folks, scientists behind said in exclusive interview many more talents available in next few years! amazing isn’t it?”
“it sure is, ryan. how can these amazing synth-g’s? being sold @ doctor’s offices specialize in genealogy , places specialize in plastic surgery. sold online , transferred nearest doctor specializes in these special procedures. of may asking, ’but how these genes inside of me?’ doctors , scientists have developed special surgical procedures insert gene body, rest of genes are, heavens knows is.”
“yep, don’t worry people, these things safe , tested. , have go out , buy buy buy them! they’re little on pricy side right now, nonetheless, people buying these things crazy! , since holiday season around corner synth-g perfect gift anyone.”
“well said, ryan, said. stay tuned because next, we’re going show our exclusive interview dr. jonathan regello , colleagues invented synth-g. now, i’m tina reagan…”
“and i’m ryan feldman. watching folks, , have great ni…”(italicized)
rolled eyes in disgust punched off button on tv remote before finish talking.
“hey!! katie, watching that!”
“brant, not watching that. don’t how stupid “synth-g’s” are? watch cartoons or normal 8 year old.”
jumped couch , stormed off kitchen, face red anger. mother sat @ our small dining table cutting out coupons looked small gardening shears. anger faded little bit saw mom merrily snipping @ crumpled coupons.


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