I missed writing poetry. . . would you forgive me and comment/critique this please?

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okay know said wasn't gonna write more poetry because people here stamp on confidence levels, guys wanna share without getting involved here if okay? btw, l1&l3 rhyme between "start" , "apart" unintentional.

wretched attraction

"roomies" start
tiny charlotte , dave.
without goodbye, wrenched apart,
not mother, not wave.
charlotte lived in grand house,
doors down changing road.
taken in unspoken trade,
connection not forbode.

dave spotted pretty lass,
hailing few doors down.
chestnut hair, similar shade,
wore "heritage" crown.
name lottie, pretty,
"cutie" of top class.
reaction set off,
boys note on grass.

hands linked them each other,
stately houses, background
open doors led room,
when mum wasn't around.
undercover,
intertwined spirits soared.
space between decimated,
inner explosion roared.

meet mrs jones, de ja vu?
she'd seen boyfriend before.
"so whats boys name?" asked.
faltering, shielding core.
"leicester, down same street",
"lottie" watched mum fainted.
worse though, informative talks.
relationship tainted.

okay know said wasn't gonna write more poetry because people here stamp on confidence levels, guys wanna share without getting involved here if okay? btw, l1&l3 rhyme between "start" , "apart" unintentional. wretched...


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